Hi! My name is Jimmy Peitz. This is a new song I'm working on called First House on the Street. It's not produced, just me and the guitar. I'm in Songwriters Club, and would love any feedback on the song.
First House on the Street
They say there’s no place like home
A place I can always run back to
When I’m broken, when I get bruised
When I’m afraid, afraid to lose
I know I can go back to you
Flooded with pictures
Dreams and memories
Of the past that made me who I am
(Chorus)
When I’ve been away for a while
And I can no longer fake a smile
I know I can stop running, with shoes on my feet
Now you can find me
At the first house on the street
Start to get older, try to ran away
To finding my place in the world
Went to too many parties, drunk and stoned
Fell in love, now I’m alone
I wanted to go home
Then I’m flooded with pictures
Flooded with dreams and memories
Of the past that made me who I am
(Chorus)
I made some friends, and I lost some
Used to be young, broke, and dumb
But I know that I can go back home
I know I can be in any room
hit with the smell of lilac perfume
Take one step in the door
I’m not leaving anymore
(Chorus)
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